Thursday, 18 June 2015

Recrafting TTS (recount / description

Recrafted version

TTS

“Whats going on” I said under my breath, Have Mr Robertson and Mrs Gordon started the block classroom already? . I stepped through the door and saw old desk’s with names on them, I looked around trying to find my desk but before I could Mr R called my name, I looked up and saw him pointing at a desk in the front row . I sat down and we started the roll .

We sang the national anthem . I liked the learning at first but then we had to do shakespeare  .I could hardly see the the words and I only understood like ten of them .After we did handwriting and we did dictionary skills .

At morning tea we got out our lunch boxes and sat at our desks . We waited for Mr R’s call to bite, once we did we waited for him to say bite again . After we did marching, by then I had lost all my self respect .

After morning tea we were told that we won’t be doing that every day . Later we did a pmi chart and a chalk talk .

Recrafted version

TTS

“Whats going on” I said under my breath, Have Mr Robertson and Mrs Gordon started the block classroom already? . I stepped through the door and saw old desk’s with names on them, I looked around trying to find my desk but before I could Mr R called my name, I looked up and saw him pointing at a desk in the front row . I sat down and we started the roll .

We sang the national anthem . I liked the learning at first but then we had to do shakespeare Dun, Dun, Dun  .I could hardly see the the words and I only understood like ten of them .After we did handwriting and we did dictionary skills .

At morning tea we got out our lunch boxes and sat at our desks . We waited for Mr R’s call to bite, once we did we waited for him to say bite again . After we did marching, by then I had lost all my self respect .

After morning tea we were told that we won’t be doing that every day . Later we did a pmi chart and a chalk talk .





TTS

“Whats going on” I said under my breath Have Mr Robertson and Mrs Gordon started the block classroom already? . I walked through the door and saw old tables with names on them, I looked around trying  to find my desk but before I could find it Mr R called my name I looked up and saw him pointing at it . I sat down and we started the roll .

We sang the national anthem . I liked it at first but then we had to do shakespeare  . Then we did handwriting,we also did dictionary skills . I could hardly see the the words and I only understood like ten of them .

At morning tea we got out our lunch boxes and sat at our desks . We waited for Mr R’s call to bite once we did we waited for him to say bite again . Then we did marching by then I had lost all my self respect .

After morning tea we were told that it won’t be doing that every day . Then we did a pmi chart and a chalk talk .


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