Tuesday, 5 May 2015

The unwanted visitor

6.5.15


“Good luck” yelled Bruce's best friend Jack from the safety platform . Bruce is going to leave mars on a top secret mission . It’s so secret even I don’t know it . He set his G.P.S to earth and left his wonderful home behind . About an hour into the journey Bruce noticed something move under a blanket. He silently walked over frightened he pulled the blanket away and to his surprise he saw a black figure run off down the hall . He looked back to where the figure was and saw a bomb that would detonate in two minutes .
Bruce ran to the pod room but instead of seeing one battle pod and one escape pod there was only an escape pod . He hopped in, started up the engine and set the G.P.S once again to earth and flew off and as he did the ship exploded . Halfway into the journey Bruce found out that he was being followed . He zoomed off and as he entered the earth’s atmosphere his only engine got shot . He picked up the first five gadgets he could see . Bruce jumped out and as he fell he used his first gadget that changed his form. He changed into a human and “SPLASH!” Bruce landed face first into some watery mud. He got up and walked north until he found a road he then followed the road west until he a town called Leo's town. He used his second gadget that let him know who to trust. He followed it to letterbox number 135 and told the people that lived there everything. They promised they would help. He then used his third gadget that would him know where nearby ships are. It said that one was at a place called area 52 . The people he was with drove him there. He then used his first gadget again and turned into a gold ant. Bruce found his way into the spaceship room and went in the most fuel efficient one. Bruce pulled out his fourth gadget that would let him drive every spaceship. he set off to find the enemy when he realised his fifth gadget could track anything and when he got back to mars he told the army and now the figure is in prison turns out he was from a far away galaxy. You may be wondering who I am, I am the General.

1 comment:

  1. I like this piece of writing because it has descriptive language and a range of language features. Good Job.

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